True Love

Okay... I am a bit doubled minded here.

First what I like. I like the theme. Though the basic theme itself revolves around love, the first love and last love concept makes it rather fun to read and the last two stanza's are really well written. The final word "perfect" adds a lot to the poem and well the ideas are well put with little jumbling up.

What I do not like is that the poem, form wise, seems like a haphazard assortment. There is free verse but I would like to see a little form coming from you; this is your typical style and for some reason it is not working here. I might have stopped before reaching the well written middle only because the form is a cliche for you.

So I would recommend (If not for this poem) another style of poetry; be a little diverse. Do not change yourself completely but I personally think this was a beautiful work overshadowed by the style adopted. A little rhyming would work a lot <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Smile)"/>