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Have you ever,
Had to break a heart?
Something you want to hold delicately and you know you should,
But circumstance means you just can't.

Have you ever,
Broke some ones heart,
Looked them in the eye,
And said goodbye.

Some people say,
That breaking some ones heart is the worst feeling.
Others say,
That having your own heart broken is worse.

That giving your heart away in the hope,
That you will never receive the shattered pieces,
Yet having it handed back to you,
Like it had been crushed for a thousand years.

Some say the worst pain is breaking a heart,
Some say it's having your heart broken by the one you trusted.
But I say different.
I think I have found the worst pain.

The worst pain is when you have given your heart away,
And then had some one give you theirs back.
But for you then,
To have to take your heart back.

For you to hold both your hearts in each hand,
Yours in your left,
His in your right,
And then to clench your hand into a fist.

The worst pain is when you not only have to break his,
But you have to break your own.
When you have no choice,
When you have to watch the pain in his eyes as you feel your heart tear open.

The worst pain in the world,
Is not a broken heart,
Is not breaking some one else's,
But to break your own heart.
inspiration hit :shrug:

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It's me again!

Quite great work here, nicely set out and the rhythm is quite well done. Remember to watch your punctuation; commas during the middle of a sentence tend to have an offputting sensation and can take the reader out of the mood of the poem. Take the first sentence for example; A little tip, when you write poetry, read it outloud to yourself to get a feel for timing and pace.
The fourth and fifth paragraph is really where you push the emotional depth of the poem, bringing not only a sense of knowledge of the subject, but also as a warning to others in the same situation. The last paragraph you ease off the subject with a subtle but equally effective message.

Overall, an excellent piece of art with a sorrowful, but wise, message. Well done
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beckypeters Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it <3 its sad but its so true
JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Student Writer
Very true unfortunately... :/ >< Ah well. Thank you :heart:
beckypeters Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That's ok
AngelofLight03 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student Writer
I really like this. You dud a great job in it. I could actually feel the pain especially when you have been in that situation. I can really relate to this. Great job. :D
JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Student Writer
Well, i do like to pour my heart and soul into a poem...ahahaha xD
AngelofLight03 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Student Writer
I can tell.
JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Student Writer
that's one thing i do love about posting it onto the internet...I mean, not only can other people read it, but it means i dont have to write my poetry down. I can log in anywhere and have my entire work there infront of me :3
AngelofLight03 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Student Writer
True. :D
JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013  Student Writer
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Student Writer
This is just... It really hits home with me, as do so many of your poems, because its so true. Conviction is behind every word, reality too.
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