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No words are needed,
The silence speaks for itself,
There is no need to form those words,
That you feel the need to say.

I can tell from you actions,
The small smile on your lips,
The twinkle in your eyes,
The skip in your step.

I can tell from the tears,
The broken heart,
The way you grip my hand tight,
The darkness in your soul.

I can tell from the knitted eyebrows,
You head cocked to the side,
Your mouth forming the question why,
The way your brain is working overtime.

I can tell by the shuffling in your step,
The clicking of your fingers,
The biting of your lip,
The feet that point inwards.

I can tell from your wide eyes,
Your limp form,
Your open mouth,
Your frozen eyes.

I can tell from the clenched fists,
The sharp movements,
The vibrating of your body,
The glare from your soul.

I can tell your mood,
From the way you move,
There is no need to speak,
I know exactly what you are going to say.

Sometimes the best way to say something,
Is to say nothing at all.
Nothing needs to be said,
Just hug me.
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:iconpercyjacksonrules123:
I felt the need to compliment this.
Well, I'd seen these type of themes for writing before, so the originality is dialed down just a bit. It's just the way that you wrote it made it different. Writing these type of poems are hard and takes time.
Your technique is good: how you change a different emotion for each stanza, and to top it all off at the end, you told us what the silence and emotions meant, and what the person wanted.
The impact was great on me. It was as if I were being hit in the heart all at once, and this fuzzy feeling traveled through me and sent me off the edge. Seeing through silence and body language, and THEN actually writing it into a poem is very difficult. I know because I've tried before. But anyway, this poem effected me, and thanks to you, I know when somebody needs a hug. :hug:
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RainbowUni-Potato Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist
Hey, can I use this as my Webcam?
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:iconjetblackheartxxx:
JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student Writer
What do you mean? Do you mean the image?
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RainbowUni-Potato Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist
yes
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:iconjetblackheartxxx:
JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Student Writer
Sure. S'long as you link to my poem somewhere on you're profile and give me credit, i don't see why not ^_^
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RainbowUni-Potato Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist
Rawr! for some reason whenever I try and put something as my webcam it doesn't work!
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:iconjetblackheartxxx:
JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Student Writer
It migth not work with this because you are linking it to a poem :C
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:iconrainbowuni-potato:
RainbowUni-Potato Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist
Yeah maybe... it never works though, not even when it's just a pic! Oh well... thanks anyway
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome
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RainbowUni-Potato Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist
Okay, thanks!
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Student Writer
:)
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Voleuro Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very nice. :hug:
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:iconjetblackheartxxx:
JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks :hug:
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ChibiOtakuSama Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012
i read it to my boyfriend and he said "my cheeks feel red" :iconblushplz:
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Student Writer
I'm glad it helped XD
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themeepynerd Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconclannadglompplz: I love hugs, but I don't do it often. Now I know that there were moments when people needed a hug and I just ignored them uncomfortably. I feel bad, but happy that I understand now!
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Student Writer
:iconletmehugyouplz: I love hugs too. I hug anyone who asks, or anyone i think needs one. Chances are, people need a hug all the time. SOme one to hold onto when they are feel low, someone to help keep them up when they are happy.
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Alakittynya Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:hug:
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Student Writer
:hug:
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BigDream64 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Me dunno how to hug you when I'm hugging my computer screen. LOL
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:iconjetblackheartxxx:
JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
I'll hug my computer screen too! XD
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KolliceKat Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
THIS IS LIKE ME AND MY BF

lol awkward
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
HOw is it? This was inspired by me and a close friend of mine...we aren't dating, but we might as well be :') We hug when we can't seemed to get the words out. It's like a subsitute for the unspoken word.
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KolliceKat Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012
i know!

me and my bf just kinda hug at moments that we can't talk

if you know what i am saying

like if we just stare at each other
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Student Writer
Yeah i understand :3
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karlanvomega Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:glomp: Amazing :D
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
:iconattackglompplz: THanks!
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capnscar Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Daww this is so sweet ;u;
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks!! I love it :3
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Neko-Josie Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Artist
That is just so sweet <3
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
I'm glad you thik so! :D
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Neko-Josie Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Artist
^^
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AmberfaII-Cat Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Spam -.-
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
I've gotten alot of it unfortunately :(
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PercyJacksonRules123 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
WUT. Why? I almost never--wait, strike that, I NEVER get spam...
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Dragon-Art14 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student General Artist
Lovely ^^ Absolutely lovely!
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
hehe thanks!
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Dragon-Art14 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student General Artist
Np ^^
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JackKrane Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
SHUT UP AND HUG ME
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
OKay! :tighthug:
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JackKrane Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
ded DX
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EspioArtwork31 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
Happy Valentine's Day SUCKER
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
That's six months away :3
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Jowesline Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student General Artist
Aww :hug: What a wonderful text! :aww:
You did a great job. ^^
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :hug:
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Jowesline Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Student General Artist
You're welcome! ^^
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CarlostheBat36 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:hug:
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