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I don't know how,
To be anyone,
But me.

Do you know how to be me?
I don't know how to be you.
I don't know how to be,
Any one but me.

I can't act like my best friend,
Nor can I pretend to be my teacher,
For i do not know how to be,
Any one but me.

I have to be myself,
I have no choice you see,
For every one else,
Is taken.

We are all unique,
Which means we are all the same,
And each and every one of use,
Doesn't know how to be the other.

I don't know about you,
Or everybody else,
But I don't know how to be,
Any one but me.
:shrug:

:icondonotuseplz::iconmyartplz:

JetBlackHeart
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I have to get critical with you. I like the theme of the poem; it is a nice one of realization of the self and it is expressed well in your poem. It starts with a three liner and the rest are four liners. It is fine.

One little problem that I did have was that in four stanza's you have ended with "but me" and in the rest of the two it doesn't end that way. that way, the rhyming of "but me" looks like a mere repetition with no intent of being a good rhyme. So if you can alter it, DO alter it.

Otherwise a good poem over a good yet well discussed topic.
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Dearlybeloved-93 Featured By Owner Jul 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
GOOD POEM IS GOOD!!
but it's already hard enough to get to know yourself and be yourself so ^-^
I surely don't want to be anyone else :3
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Student Writer
I dont want to be anyone but me.....

BAD POEM IS BAD
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Dearlybeloved-93 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
good
it's sad some people do though...

Y u always say your poem is bad?! O___o
make it better if you aren't happy with it :o
I like, and ither peeps like so :o
BAD POEM ISN'T THAT BAD AS YOU THINK :p
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TheOneFallenAngel Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, My Dear, You're Just Perfect Being Yourself. :heart::iconbackhug::heart:
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Student Writer
aw. thank you :heart:
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:icontheonefallenangel:
TheOneFallenAngel Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
~Anytime. :iconbackhug:
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Student Writer
Heh :blush::iconbackhug:
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dark-harou Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely :heart:
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JetBlackHeartxxx Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Student Writer
heh :3 :heart:
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dark-harou Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's funny how random things we say throughout the day can inspire us :)
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